flowing like music
calm as night
rushing like the wind
but soothing to the sight
clear as crystal
mirroring the sky above
drowning in your beauty
swept away by love
take me away
to the forest of dreams
where wishes come true
and happiness gleams
yet wake me, if you must
with a plash from thee
that I may differ make-believe
from reality
~my entry to Magpie Tales
*photo credits: River, by Marina Moevs, 2005
c/o Tess Kincaid
22 comments:
This is a very lovely piece, Kuya Nate. I especially like this:
take me away
to the forest of dreams
That is one hell of a nice couple of lines.
Keep on writing. More, more, more!
@pointlessparanoia: hello Jay! aww.. shucks.. thank you!! glad to know you appreciate my piece.. :)
Wow! nice piece! Looove the 3rd verse.. :)
@Leah: thanks!! :D i'm happy you liked it! :)
Truly inspiring! Love it, Nate...
@aboutambot: thanks! :)
Lovely, dreamy ......
I much enjoyed your strict rhyming.
or let me sleep
while you silently
kiss me feet
i know i am safe...
-the geek
@Helen: thanks! it really has that dreamy feel.. :)
Doctor FTSE: thank you!
@geek: wow! really nice lines, geek.. methinks, it could be the 5th verse of the poem.. :)
smooth , lovely lines !
:)
@Nimue: thanks! :)
Beautiful to read and imagine. Well done.
uy! maganda toh! pwde!
@C Hummel Kornell: thanks for your nice words! i'm happy you liked my poem.. :)
@Mac Callister: oy MAC!!! thanks for dropping by and leaving a comment.. :)
Beautifully done. The manner of enchantment is feasible. Graspable by mind. Truly enchanting!
@Tim Smithson: aww.. shucks.. thank you! that's exactly the "feel" that I'd wan't for this poem.. dreamy.. enchanting.. :)
hongtorooooy! :D eeeeeeeeeeeeeeee..... i love the serenity of the piece. tamang emo lang!
Very light..nakaka-feel good. ^__^ Good morning, Nate.
@RonronTuRon: hi fwend!! hahahaha! hontoroy ba?? :) thanks! :D
@grammarkiller: hi jerro!! awe.. thanks!! and good morning din! :)
Nice!
@Tess Kincaid: thanks! :)
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